Thursday, November 10, 2016

mash mollows

Hi Im Dani and I have done alot of work we write about have fun reading It.

The Haunted woods .
On a fine night a Monster came because he smelled marshmallows but had not tried one before so once he tried a marshmallow he loved It. He fell in love with the marshmallow .He wished  he was a marshmallow monster also he wished he was in marshmallow land. But he was not. He was sad so  Mack (the boy in the woods) gave him more marshmallows. He was so happy he loved It. He lickd the boy like he wanted to eat him but he didn't because he could give him more marshmallows. He wanted to go  home but his parents were gone. He didn't know where to go so he walked and walked and walked. Until  he found his house because it said his name on the house and his parents names on the house. Then he ran away back to camp where the monster was. Then Bang! The monster was in his bag and grabbed all the marshmallows because the monster wants more marshmallows. Then BOOM! The monster ate all of the marshmallows and the monster got angry and chased after him. Then Mack  holding a white pillow in front of him so the monster thought it was a marshmallow.  The boy was right he thought It was a marshmallow and so the boy threw It. Away In the forest and the monster ran after It and then Mack ran away in the forest. The monster saw him run away so he went to the camp fire and grabbed a stick and put the white pillow looked like a marshmallow  on the stick and put it in front of the fire and then BOOM! The white pillow burned and caught on fire. The monster was very sad. The End. by: Noah Dani.


  1. Hi Dani Jorja here .
    I'd like to say that you and noah have done a great job on this and some of the ajectives in this are awsome .
    I hope you had fun doing this bye.

  2. Kia ora Dani. This is really good Love the way you have put it into a color people can read and so it is easy to understand well done and Noah kai pai keep up the awesome work.

  3. Hi Dani Emily here.
    This is a great amount of writing. I think that you wrote more than me. you and noah did a great job. Keep up the great work.

  4. Hi Dani it is Siyona here
    This is great work and you added more things in your story
    next step is if you put someone's name put a space or a comma .


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